IELTS Writing Task 2 Daily Update 019-Household goods buying

(2018 Season 3 Mr Tang Laoya’s Prediction Test 8)

I. Writing prompt

More and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television, microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

II. Revised version

1. Beginning

During the hot summer days, we keep cool with the companion of air-conditioners; when we want to do our laundry, we turn to the washing machine in the corner; if we feel bored, we can turn on the wide screen HD super thin TV in the living room, and the list can go on and on. Nowadays we turn to bring home increasing number of household electronic appliances. From my point of view, this trend indicates both positive and negative development.

2. Main body #1

On the one hand, more household goods provide us modern earth inhabitants with more convenience and comfort. In the past, we have to cook meal with coal or firewood, which is quite complex and time-consuming, while right now we can use microwave oven and rice cooker to prepare delicious food in no time and with least effort. What we need to do is just put the raw food ingredients in the container and switch on the power button of the electronic kitchenware. Besides, just about 5 years ago, we still have to sweep the floor with broom, nevertheless at present, we have floor cleaning robot to do the tedious job for us. Hence modern household consumer commodities like the ones mentioned above really help to liberate us from repetitive housework and at the same time offer us more leisure and welfare.

3. Main body #3

Despite the benefits household appliances present to us modern global villagers, some people argue that too many electronic gadgets translate into more downsides than upsides. For instance, we used to wash the dishes with our own hands, yet now we can hand the tough and dirty job to the dishwasher. Superficially this is rather positive in terms of lessen the burden of the housewives or househusbands, it is actually very energy inefficient, creat huge amount of greenhouse gases and cause a lot of harm to the eco-system we rely on so heavily for a healthy life style. On top of that, apart from the ridiculous high bills we have to pay for those electronic appliances, when our life is packed with a variety of media novelties such as home movie screening system, video players, iPad, potable game machine like Xbox 360 of the Microsoft company, we tend to get addicted to them and ignor our study, work and workout commitment. Therefore, all these defects of more than enough household gadgets call for our serious rethinking to invite them to our life.

4. The end

In conclusion, the availability of greater number of household items brings about both advantages and disadvantages for our modern people, which is like a double-edged sword in our life. It makes senses that we give full play to the strengthes of them, such as time-saving, convenience and labor-efficiency, while at the same time guard against its weaknesses like large carbon footprint, high cost and unhealthy psychological obsession.

III. Review remarks

Practice makes perfect. After continuous updating of 19 IELTS Writing Task 2 essays, the overall performance of my essay writing is felt making an obvious progress. As for this original creative piece of work, I didn’t make any rewriting of the entire essay structure and main messages. What I revised are just some slips of pen, a couple of minor spelling or sentence errors and some alternations of little bits of factual information. In the days to come, I will persist in renewing this type of writing and perhaps more kinds of genres if there are more time available and contribute more to the art of creative writing and the constructions of noble souls.