13 –高级-单元3：DESCRIBING AN E-COMMERCE SITE

题目

Write a paragraph describing an e-commerce site you have  used or heard about. Comment on the site's functionality and product range.  How does it compare to similar sites?

老师留言

Agreement: I would like you to please kindly remember that  we use the verb to be 'are' with plural nouns such as 'words'. You wrote,  "Its catching words is this..." for example. It would be better to  write, "Its catching words are this..." instead. Word choice: I  also noticed that you used the noun 'fashion' where you wrote, "The  tmall.com is the upgraded fashion of the taobao.com". I suggest using the  noun 'version' to write, "tmall.com is the upgraded version of  taobao.com" instead. We do not use definite articles ('the') before the  name of websites in English.

Start with amazon.com and then google.com, I have  experienced very convenient online purchasing, and witnessed a few online  companies who started from a scratch and now have grown up to be global  giants. Recently, I am frequenting tmall.com, a new all-inclusive online  market built up by a Chinese e-commerce giant, Mr. Ma Yun. Its catching words  are this: “Tmall.com, one stop for everything.” Tmall.com is the upgraded version  of Taobao.com, another everything-included online market previously built up  by Mr. Ma. Besides its broad product range offering abundant choices and  selections, Tmall.com excels also at good website usability, high-quality  products, diverse payment and delivery options, technical support and product  knowledge in customer service, etc. The difference between tmall.com and  taobao.com is fundamental. Initially, taobao.com provided virtual spaces for  other vendors, mostly small businesses and let them do business on their own.  Years later, Taobao.com has been overwhelmed by inferior imitations for which  Mr. Ma was blamed. Now tmall.com is supervised more directly by Mr. Ma’s business  management team, and has a stringent requirement for other business vendors  to join in. See! Now I am enjoying my shopping. All of the things I want are  available from the home page with a navigation bar at the top that will allow  users to go directly to different product categories. TheWeb design is really  creative. Incorporating the brand colors into the design, the sites are  colorful with their background, eye-catching buttons and logos and  fascinating sales pitches, etc. By clicking the product thumbnails I can see  the general descriptions, a convenient shopping cart is ready at hand.  However, the whole site looks very familiar to you. You don’t have to figure  out how the site works. Easy! Shopping online is as much fun as going to the  mall. Actually, they have such good online deals. Go with tmall.com.

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