9 – 3：MAKING THE MOST OF YOUR LIFE

题目

Write about making the most of your life. What lessons  have you already learned about life? What is most important to you in life?  What do you try to do every day? What advice would you give to others?

老师留言

Preposition (PR) - You have used the right prepositions at  the right places. For e.g. "Home, family and friends are necessary for  everyone. A rich, healthy personal life prepares us physically, mentally and  spiritually, enabling us to stretch our life out from family to the  society.". Word Choice (WC) - You have used a very good choice of words  in your writing submission. For e.g. "A matured individual must also  have full membership of a community and then the whole society, to where we  contribute our services and from where we earn our bread for daily living.  Studying bridges one to one's society by preparing, drilling and improving us  with possible knowledges of all mankind."

To talk about a good life, Chinese elderly always stress  on three aspects: daily living, studying and working. One's daily living can  also be called as one's personal life, which includes one's private life,  family life and time expended with friends. Home, family and friends are necessary  for everyone. A rich, healthy personal life prepares us physically, mentally  and spiritually, enabling us to stretch our life out from family to the  society. While we are growing, we are aspiring to be grown up. A matured  individual must also have full membership of a community and then the whole  society, to where we contribute our services and from where we earn our bread  for daily living. Studying bridges one to one's society by preparing,  drilling and improving us with possible knowledge of all mankind. Well  education enables us to provide valuable services to our society; and quality  contributions and services make sure proportionate rewards to enrich our  daily living; and then a quality daily living ensures an efficient studying.  We call this a virtuous cycle. To lead our only once life as an abounding  one, we must equally emphasize on the three aspects. Keeping balances on the  three, we are leading our life on a good, safe track. Otherwise, we could be  derailed, stranded or even sunk by our own lives.

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