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While most people think of snoring as a minor annoyance, research shows it can be hazardous to your health.
虽然大多数人认为打呼噜是轻微的令人烦恼的小麻烦，但是研究说明，它会对人们健康产生危害。
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your 对大家的，翻译成人们
That’s because for over millions of people it’s related to obstructive sleep apnea(OSA).
因为对于超过数百万的人们而言，打鼾与阻塞性睡眠呼吸暂停（OSA)有关。
People who suffer from OSA repeatly and unknowingly stop breathing during the night due to a complete or partial obstruction of their airway.
OSA患者在夜间会不知不觉反复地停止呼吸，这是由于气道全部或部分阻塞。
It occurs when the jaw, throat, and tongue muscles relax, blocking the airway used to breathe.
打鼾发生于下颚，喉咙和舌头肌肉的松弛，而这会阻碍用来呼吸的气道。
The resulting lack of oxygen can last for a minute or longer, and occur hundreds of time each night.
由此导致的缺乏氧气情况可能会持续一分钟或者更久，并且每晚可能会发生数以百计。
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Thankfully, most people wake when a complete or partical obstruction occurs, but it can leave you feeling completely exhausted.
值得庆幸的是，当完全或者部分阻塞发生时，大多数人会醒来，但是这可能会让人觉得非常的疲惫。
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OSA has been linked to a host of health problems including acid reflux, memory loss, stroke, depression, and heart attack.
OSA与许多健康问题有所关系，如胃酸反流，记忆力缺失，中风，沮丧和心脏病。
OSA can be expensive to diagnosis, and treat, and is not always covered by insurance.
OSA的诊断和治疗可能很昂贵，而且也不总是在保险范围内。
标点符号一般与原文保持一致。
A sleep clinic will require an overnight visit(up to $5000).
一个睡眠诊所将要求一个过夜观察（高达5000元）。
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括号就按照括号，不要提前
Doctors then analyze the data and prescribe one of several treatments.
然后，医生分析数据，并且开处方决定采取多种治疗方法中的一个。
These may require you to wear uncomfortable CPAP devices, and may even include painful surgery.
这些治疗方法可能会要求你穿上不舒服的连续正气压呼吸机面罩（CPAP），甚至可能会包括痛苦的手术。
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Fortunately, there is now a comfortable, far less costly and invasive treatment option available.
幸运的是，现在人们可以选择有一个舒服的，花费少得多的且侵入性低的治疗方法。
Recent case study published in the Journal of Clinical Sleep Medicine concludes that wearing a simple chinstrap while you sleep can be an effective treatment for OSA.
一个最近的刊登在《临床睡眠医学期刊》（Journal of Clinical Sleep Medicine ）的案例得出结论，当你睡觉时，佩戴一个简单的下颚带，可能是治疗OSA有效的方法。
The chin strap, which is now available from a company called My snoring Solution, works by supporting the lower jaw and tongue, preventing obstruction of the airway.
这种下颚带的工作原理是 其通过支持下颚和舌头肌肉来阻止呼吸道阻碍。
现在，人们就可以买到“鼾立停”（My snoring Solution）公司的这种下颚带。
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第一原则是准确，不要太多意译，直接直译。