Sitting in front of the desk , I thought
about how to modify my article. At the moment, I heard a mumble “mommy…”.
I turned round and saw my little girl rolling over on the bed with eyes closed.
I came to her and sat beside, watching her fondly.
It was half past seven. The sunshine was soft. It lit the room from the
windows ,and made the place warm and golden. My little girl slept on her
tummy, and showed up her side face, just like a round cotton candy upon the
bed. Her eyes were closed. The eyelashes cast shadows on her eyelids .
She breathed soft, and her small mouth opened a little. I could hear the
slight air flow came out from it. What a lovely and angelic baby !
I remembered the scene the last night when I was playing with her. She put all the
colorful toy blocks into the ancillary pail ,and then lifted it
happily with her words saying,”I am going to market.” I smiled and replied,”
Oh, you’re going to market, with your beloved pail.” “Yeah, I am going
to wandering.”
Holding the pail in her right hand, and relying against
the back of the sofa by her left hand , she walked slowly from the sofa
surface to one of the sofa handles.Then, she jumped down from the
sofa, and said happily, “I am going to wandering with my pail, so happy.” I laughed
and asked, “ when will you come back?”
“I am coming back.” With her eyes bright, she came to me. Before I took
her, she turned around and aimed to the sofa handle where she jumped
down before. With bright giggles, she climbed up the sofa, and then shouted , “ I
am back!” I smiled and said, “great!”
“ I am going to market again.” She jumped down again. I couldn’t help laughing loudly.
Charged five minutes and be active for two hours. What a little vampire she
always likes! But this moment , she settled down so quietly.
Everything seemed so peaceful and soft. Years such as gold, time is still good.
这篇文章经修改，英语精进如下：
1）并列句必须加连词，否则就是语法错误。and/or/but/so/for。
2）逻辑连接，smile and said是笑着说，不能smile后面直接加“对话”。
3）with one's words saying,有saying才可以直接引用。
4）写外语文章，按外语语言习惯来写。小屁孩在中文世界可以是调皮猴，英语用little vampire，来源于Little Vampire《小小吸血鬼》动画。
5）使用非谓语动词（-ing、-ed），句子会更简洁。