初二作文修改案例 an accident

作文二 点评：单词没有书写错误。字迹清晰较好没有无法识别的单词。词组大多数正确用词丰富，少数几个不准确： fell off, forget to do , took sb to, in a hurry …。但是，句子就差的较远。首先中式思维，几乎按中文字字对应来做，其次，句子基本结构不完整，对断句不理解导致标点符号使用不当。修改如下，仔细体会。

修改：This morning, I saw an accident in front of a supermarket not far from the school. A man fell off the ladder and hurt his leg. When he was putting up a poster on the ladder, his mobile phone rang suddenly. He tried to get the mobile phone in a hurry，but forgot to hold the ladder. His friends took him to the hospital.

In daily life, we must continue to pay more attention to the safety problem, in order to avoid accidents.