甘比英文拓展写作-描述动物-草叮

The cheetah, like a big cat missing the whiskers and wearing a light yellow coat with many circular-shaped spots on it, is bucking and trying to catch the poor antelope, which shows up as a large scale of Tom and Jerry. With a slender lean stature body and four long strong legs, cheetah is the world’s fastest land mammal. The whip-liked tale, close to the end of which there are some black ring marks, can assist the cheetah with its balance. Comparing to the head of a lion or a tiger, the cheetah’s head is rather small and flat. Observing more carefully, we can discover two black tears- like lines ranging from its canthi to its mouth tear-stained black marks running down the sides of his nose, which are conducive to absorb the sunshine, so as to widen its vision . What mentioned above makes the cheetaha a born ferreter. Hence, don’t be perplexed by the cheetah’s cute face-two tiny short triangle ears, a dog-like snout, and a pair of round eyes. Otherwise, you may be the next prey of this ferocious carnivorous animal.

总评：1.有种面面俱到但没重点的感觉，然后扩充得有些过分了（比如对猎豹一些局部的功能的描写）

2.多处的句子使用了主语+长长的修饰语+谓语。。。这样有种头重脚轻的感觉，应该尽量避免（虽然并不知道如何避免O_O）