Education Essay - Student Competition

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

P1:

People have different views on children should be taught to be competitive or co-operative, while a sprite of competition can sometimes be very useful, I believe that the ability to cooperate is more important.

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P1 Note:

People have different views on 

while ...... , I believe that ......

a sprite of competition

can sometimes be useful

the ability to cooperate

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P2:

On the one hand, competition can a great source of motivation for children. 

When teachers use games or prizes to introduce an element of competitiveness into pupils, it can encourage children to work harder to outdo the other pupils in the class. This healthy rivalry may help to build children's self-confidence, while pushing them to work independently or progress more quickly. 

When these children leave school, their confidence and determination will help them in competitive situations such as job interviews.

It can therefore be argued that competition should be encouraged in order to prepare children for adult life.

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P2 Notes:

a great source of 

introduce ...... into ......

an element of competitiveness

it can ......

outdo 

rivalry

may / might / perhaps

push them to work independently

progress more quickly

it can therefore be argued that

in order to 

prepare children for adult life

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P3 :

On the other hand, it is perhaps even more important to prepare children for the many aspects of adult life that require co-operation. 

In the workplace, adults are expected to work in teams, follow instructions given by superiors, supervise and support the more junior members of staff. Team collaboration skills are much more useful than a competitive determination to win. This is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in young people.

Instead of promoting the idea that people are winners or losers, teachers could show children that they gain more from working together.

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P3 Notes:

many aspects of 

workplace

be expected to 

team collaboration skills

a competitive determination to win

this is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in young people.

instead of 

promote ideas

gain 

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P4:

In conclusion, I understand why people might want to encourage competitiveness in children, but it seems to me that a co-operative attitude is much more desirable in adult life.

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P4 Notes:

might

encourage competitiveness in children

it seems to me that 

a co-operative attitude 

desirable 

in adult life