甘比英文拓展写作-描述房间-草叮

The picture shows an interior view of a wooden cottage. First, let’s observe the open kitchen, inside which there is a worktop consisting of three cabinets(1). On the worktop is some stuff-a sink, a rag, aninduction cooker, a coffee maker and a microwave(2). When preparing the dishes, we can enjoy beautiful sceneries through a window over the worktop. On both sides of the window are two lovely lights, presenting themselves as the upper parts of wine glasses upside down and giving out warm orange light. A clock and a pot are hung on the wall(3). After cooking, a couple can sit face to face and have their meals in front of a board, one of whose edge is fixed on the left wall of the kitchen(4). Two sets of covers have been neatly placed on the board. In the center of the cottage, a ladder, comprised of several boards, serves as a shelf as well as an approach to the attic(5). With eyes moving to the left, we can see a door and a window which ensures enough light into the cottage(6).

自评：

(1) three cabinets 改成two cabinets and black-fringed white dishwasher，原来那个白色的柜子是洗碗机呀，，，写的时候一直在纠结是垃圾桶还是消毒碗柜，，open kitchen改成bare-born kitchen

(2)貌似sink不算stuff，可以删掉

(3)感觉这句话好生硬，而且不重要，删掉吧

(4)a board改成the dining table

(5)a ladder改成a shelf ladder，删掉a shelf as well as，更加简洁；in the center of the cottage 改成sticking out into the center space；the attic改成a flat attic，因为是文中第一次提到；可以一笔带过书架上的物品

(6)a window改成a big side window；加个结尾，比如with wood being the main material, the whole cottage is of traditional classic style.然后把第一句的wooden去掉

总评：

感觉每个地方都提及了，但没突出重点，这样会显得文章很平，没有起伏，不够出彩，最好找个切入点；另外一点就是用词不够准确，这和词汇量有关。。