批改一篇高考作文,无论是什么体裁,通常分三部分,即内容、语言和组织结构。本文将从这三部分分别展开。
一、内容
内容应具体真实,贴近生活,不要喊口号、说空话。也不要一味地追求题材新颖,容易偏题。
写对内容主要看审题,如何正确审题呢?
例如2013年上海高考作文:
上海博物馆拟举办一次名画展,现就展出场所(博物馆还是社区图书馆)征集公众意见。假设你是王敏,给上海博物馆写一封信表达你的想法。你的信必须满足以下要求:
1.简述你写信的目的及你对场所的选择;
2.说明你的理由(从便利性、专业性等方面对这两个场所进行对比)。
第一,确定主题为“为画展选址”
第二,格式为“向博物馆写信”
第三,简述写信目的(简述意为简单叙述,一两句话带过)
第四,选择场馆(必须做出选择,不能两者都要)
第五,说明理由(要在某方面将两者进行比较)
一般高考作文可根据内容分成3至5段,因此内容应合理分配。
同时,在说明理由时不能一味地下定论“我认为什么什么好”,而应该做到“有理有据”。例如论证便利性:博物馆好——位于市中心交通方便——相反社区地段相对偏僻
例如论证专业性:博物馆好——多次承办画展经验丰富且安保措施到位
二、语言
如果通篇形容词用的是good,好不容易想出来个词组却反复使用,那语言分必然就会很低。那如何提升一篇文章的语言呢?主要可以通过变换词性、语言简练、适当地加入形容词和副词、加入词组、同义词转换、语态转换等等。下面进行举例,但主要还是要靠同学们自己日常的积累哦。
原句:It’s popular.
加入副词:It’s increasingly popular.
变换词性:It has gained increasing popularity.
原句:In addition, more and more factors have threatened it.
语言简练:Additionally, increasing factors have threatened it.
加入副词:Additionally, increasing factors have potentially threatened it.
变换词性:Additionally, increasing factors have potentially posed a threat to it.
原句:Changes have taken place in technology in 2008.
加入形容词:Dramatic changes have taken place in technology in 2008.
语态转换:2008 has witnessed dramatic changes in technology.
原句:It benefits me.
变换词性:It's beneficial to me.
同义词转换:It’s conducive to myself.
加入副词:It’s undoubtedly conducive to myself.
原句:The attractive city life affords us many job and education opportunities.
同义词转换:The glamorous city life affords us abundant job and education opportunities.
加入词组:The glamorous city life affords us abundant job and an easy access to education.
值得注意的是,语言优美并不代表词藻过于华丽,一味的加入修饰词可能会使句子冗长啰嗦,因此在表达时应注意长短句结合,不要显得用力过猛。
语法结构应丰富:主语从句、表语从句、同位语从句、定语从句、宾语从句、状语从句、非谓语、虚拟语气、倒装句、强调句、插入语、感叹句等。
三、组织结构
简单来说,组织结构体现了整篇文章的逻辑性。我们可以用逻辑连词以及一些固定句型使句与句之间、段落与段落之间衔接更顺畅。
1. 常用逻辑词
表总结/观点: In a word, Therefore, To sun up, From my perspective, In my personal point of view, As I see it, As far as I am concerned, From where I stand, From my standpoint, In a nutshell, Generally speaking, Personally, Above all, All in all, As a whole, In conclusion, As a result, On the whole, After all
引出论点(通常两到三个):To begin with, From one thing, Firstly, First and foremost, First of all, Initially, Meanwhile, Besides, In addition, Secondly, What’s more, Additionally, Moreover, More importantly, Worse still, Furthermore
表转折:However, While, But, Instead, By contrast, On the contrary, In fact, In reality
表举例:For example, For instance, As to, In particular, Involving, In other words
2. 固定句型
开头:
As is vividly depicted from the picture...
Great changes have taken place in...
Hearing that..., I’m writing to...
In contemporary society, it is universally acknowledged that...
结尾:
Taking into account of all these factors, we can safely reach/arrive at/come to a conclusion that...
We should, therefore, reach a conclusion that...
We can hardly fail to notice that...
We should attach primary importance to/give priority to...
It’s imperative/essential/urgent that effective measures should be taken to...
It’s high time that we should spare no effort to...
If we continue to ignore the problem, ...
Only in this way can we find solutions to cope with theses problems.
In any case, whether it’s good or not, one thing is certain/for sure, that sth is here to stay.
It’s my conviction that/ I’m firmly convinced that...
It will exert a profound/direct/immediate/detrimental influence on...
There is no doubt that...
Effective measures should be taken before it is too late.
数据:
As is illustrated/described in the chart/figure...
It can be seen from the graph/table/bar chart/pizza chart that...
According to the data of the table...
From the chart we can see that...
There has been a dramatic increase since...
The biggest change occurred in the period when...
There’s a significant difference/distinction between...
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