20170115第3次修改版

        安妮老师提醒我要多注意观察图片,我这次特别观察了5分钟,然后抄了一遍修改意见。先放个笔记版本的。需要看无痕版本的请直接拉到最下方。

There are four aquilegia on the picture. They are naturally beautiful-lookingand full of mysteries.(安妮老师说,beautiful-looking这个词非常的假大空,我思想后可以改成:they represent different meanings of bloom.)The most attractive one is on the top of the picture which has(has去掉,此处时代不对,应该用过去式)opened fully. The stigma is yellow. (此句改为Its stamens are yellow.)And the anthers are dense and long, which look likethe legs of a spider.(They are dense and long,这里意为花蕊又长又密集,像蜘蛛的脚一样。)(主句应该分为2个句子,不然不清楚后面从句到底修饰的是花柱还是花蕊)And we can not see the pollen tube on the picture. Maybe they are curly.(这句话应该整体删掉,改为The ovary are light purple, and the color becomes deeper than the part of the petals which near the end.)Five petals, surrounded the anthers and filaments(改为sepals), impress us with the mixture of purple and white. It has four(输错了,花瓣是5片,改为five) pieces ofdeep purple needle-shaped leaves. However, the color of the leaves is deeperthan that of the petals.(删掉,改为主观陈述,The indigo of the flower body is like a flowing stream.)

The flower next to the glorious one has not fully opened. The color of the anther is light yellow and the petals are not open. (直接改为The petals are not open )We can only see apiece of leave on the picture.

I adore the third one with its layers upon layers of delicate petals. But it hasno leaves. The last one we can only see half of the petals.(这句话可以全部删掉) It is attractive and makes us to share the wonderful bloom with everyone.(这句话可以改为The wonders of the flowers are beyond imagination and we want to share the wonderful bloom with everyone.)

下面是无痕版本的

There are four aquilegia on the picture. They represent different meanings of bloom. The most attractive one is on the top of the picture which opened fully. Its stamens are yellow,and they are dense and long, The ovary are light purple, and the color becomes deeper than the part of the petals which near the end. Five petals, surrounded sepals, impress us with the mixture of purple and white. It has five pieces of deep purple needle-shaped leaves.The indigo of the flowerbody is like a flowing stream.

The flower next to the glorious one has not fully opened.We can only see a piece ofleave on the picture.

I adore the third one with its layers upon layers of delicate petals. But it has no leaves. The wonders of the flowers are beyond imagination and we want to share the wonderful bloom with everyone.

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