02.28第一次纯英文点评

@刘学凤|007-3181|践行 【The title】How to improve education quality【Link】http://mp.weixin.qq.com/s/CGp0Q4Ls1UXL4Yv6J3GryA【Commenter】Liu Rong 007-3126【Comments】lauraliu，I'm very glad to comments to your posts，after first saw your full English article ,it shocked me fully, I thought it was the computer out of the question.Again confirmed, found that there is nothing wrong with, you are my first meet all comrades of English writing.I want to use my English that have not use for a long time and try to review, if there is any wrong, please forgive me.

After read your article, I have the following the harvest and the suggestion:

1、As a discussion essay, you write very successful, between the arguments and the seamless docking, and your opinion is very have their own uniquenes.As a child in the mother will soon enter the school, also agree with your point of view.Article will also own disagree with two points also did analysis shows that in terms of structure, is very strict;

2、One thing is in need of improvement, the separation between words and words in the article is not obvious, the English don't like Chinese, too close to get the feel be a word, let a person look not to understand, sometimes don't know what is the cause of the text or you are in the process of writing habits, hope can be improved, this is my personal advice.

3、Finally,I hope I can learn from you, and sometimes can try to use English to write the article, in a word, today's comments on let me remember profoundly, some sentences are borrowed from the translation tool, inappropriate laughed.