沈老师英语写作
临场限时写作中,有的学生往往觉得无话可写,甚至无从下笔。关键问题在于思路没有打开,要想思路打开,审题是关键。这样一来,读懂所给材料是关键,一段150-250左右的英文材料。
快速抓住材料主要内容,罗列关键词。
讲究抓大放小,思路才能活起来。以下篇为例:
It's show time! China’s TV channels have ever been full of various shows since the craze for Super Girl in 2004. Regarding voice as the only ruler, the Voice of China quickly became popular around Chinese mainland and topped a league of all shows broadcast by the country's local TV stations. Its popularity also drew record advertising, the final episode(集)attracting an ad spend of 500,000 yuan per second. Plus, the episodes of If You Are the One(非诚勿扰), both hot and controversial,became an instant hit,proving that dating shows can be entertaining and mainstream at the same time. Another TV show Where Are We Going, Dad? Produced by Hunan Satellite Television, has been wowing(使……叫好)audiences across the nation, filling the Internet with heated discussions about the father's figure.
【写作内容】
用约30个英语单词写出上文概要;
【分析】本篇材料反映的是中国各大电视台所主办的各类真人秀节目风靡全国的现象,并罗列了从《超女》到《爸爸去哪儿了?》等各大节目受到热捧的情况。概括起来有一定的难度,对于学生来说会有以下几个误区:
学生可能想到列举节目名称,却又不知道选哪个或那几个好,造成捡了芝麻、丢掉西瓜的问题。
不会概括选材的大意,可能会无端的延伸或拔高,其实,材料只是反映了真人秀备受追捧这样一个现象或事实。
【解读】碰到第一个误区时,就需要考生懂得分类和概括,即,不需要列举节目名称,可以将它们归类,这些真人秀节目可以分为talent show, dating show, reality show三类。这样的做法可以用于很多列举类的文本概述中。
第二种误区也是比较普遍的,学生经过一定训练之后,掌握了一些“套路”,无论碰到什么样的文本都会生搬硬套,这样就会产生偏离文本内容甚至离题万里的问题,势必会影响下面段落的写作。所以第一段的写作一定要坚持高度精准地概括材料内容,无需添加自己的想法或观点,最多在段末加上衔接的语句(建议用非限制性定语从句或分词)。
丢掉原文,思维才能不受限制。
解决了以上两个思维或审题误区之后,还要注意避免局限在原文中,解题思路才能被打开。因为,材料也好、第一段也罢,只是为了引出话题。
所以,正确的写法是这样的:
Nowadays numerous/ various TV shows have become/ are becoming __________________________________. These shows, ranging from ______________, have gained/ received both ____________.
More practice:
Passengers are banned from eating and drinking on subway trains, according to a regulation recently released by Nanjing's transport authorities. Under the new rule, passengers should not eat or drink in subway cars, though they are still allowed to eat at the stations. The Metro operators will first warn and then fine violators between 20 yuan to 100 yuan.
The regulation caused a strong reaction of the whole society and started a heated discussion. Supporters say that passengers who eat on trains annoy others with unwanted smells and make messes with spilled food or beverages(饮料). However, some others believe otherwise, saying that the fast pace of big cities squeezes people's time and makes it hard for them to get a proper meal. Authorities should be more tolerant of those who need to dine on the train.
【写作内容】 用约30个单词写出上文概要;
【分析】本材料不同于上一篇,是典型的正反观点直陈式材料,所以概括的时候除了对事件本身进行总结归纳外,还应有概括事件造成的影响的语句,但不要重复原文内容。
有效的做法是罗列关键词:Nanjing's transport authorities, regulation, ban, fine, a heated discussion, opinions, varied/ different …
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顺延审题思路,展开第二段的写作。
接下来的段落一般多为分析事件/现象/问题的原因,或剖析问题或后果,本部分应为文章的主体段落,应该浓墨重彩。
以第一篇为例:
用约120个英语单词就各类“秀”节目谈谈你的看法,内容包括:
(1)探究节目受到追捧的原因;
(2)分析节目存在的潜在问题;
(3)请你对改进节目提出至少两点建议。
1. 先写本段的主题句或过渡句(至少两种):
Example 1: Their massive popularity is mainly based on simple facts.
Yours sentence: __________________
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Example 2: The shows enjoy popularity mainly owing/ due to the following facts. / Their popularity mainly lie/ consist in the following factors.
Yours sentence:
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分析节目受到追捧的原因,或者说为什么观众喜欢看这样的节目。建议2-3点,先想思路,要点之间有什么样的关联,要点之间有没有语意的重复,能不能衔接或合并,怎样衔接合并。然后,再考虑用什么句型和结构表达出来,这其实就是整个构思和句型巧妙地融合。训练阶段建议顺序不要颠倒。即,先构思后表达。熟练之后其实就是同步的过程。要点表达的句式结构也尽量不要完全一样。
罗列思路要点:
care about/focus on… social concerns; promote/ inspire/ encourage…pursuit of dreams at grassroots level; combine fashion with entertainment/ explore a perfect balance between international form and Chinese expression…
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存在的问题和前面句群之间也应有合理的过度或衔接(即话锋一转)。过于追捧选秀节目会对青年人又怎样的负面影响,建议写2-3点。
Despite the popularity/ apparent highlights, much room ____________ (leave) for improvement.
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末段是文章结尾,即肩负着总结全文的作用,更是对所写主题提出解决办法或建议的段落。同样要求与上文衔接,又能自成一体。不能简单重复第二段的内容。
As far as I’m concerned/ Personally, I believe that/ From my perspective/ On my personal note, …
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More practice:(地铁禁止快餐饮料)
用约120个单词发表你的观点,内容包括:
(1)支持或反对这个规定;
(2)用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的观点。
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范文
(1)Nowadays numerous TV shows have become extremely popular among Chinese audiences. Those programs, ranging from talent or dating shows to reality shows, have received both commercial success and public concern.
Their massive popularity is mainly based on simple facts. First, they care about social concerns. Second, they promote pursuit of dreams at grassroots level. Third, without exception, they explore a perfect balance between international form and Chinese expression.
Despite apparent highlights, much room is left for improvement. Above all, commercial interest often overweighs educational purposes, causing much complaints about unbearable advertisements. In addition, some sharp remarks, though eye-catching and overwhelming, may have misleading effect on the youth.
In my opinion, such shows should shoulder more responsibility instead of merely entertaining the public. As is expected, these programs should be both humanistic and positive in their form and function. Meanwhile, the media should also safeguard the core value of our society.
(2)Nanjing’s transport authorities have recently declared a total ban on eating and drinking on subway trains. Those who violate the regulation shall be fined. Citizens’ opinions on the rule vary from person to person.
Personally, I am in favor of the rule. To begin with, eating and drinking on subway trains may annoy other passengers and the subway staff, as food and drink may be spilled or give out an unpleasant smell. Only by forcing the riders not to eat can we improve the carriage environment and relieve the staff of increasing workload. Furthermore, remains of food, unless taken away, will attract mice and other pests, which eventually brings risks to the subway operation. In this case, the eating ban on trains is a must to ensure smooth operation.
In short, this new regulation will ensure us a safe and wonderful travel experience. Moreover, by kicking the habit of eating on the subway, the passengers will develop a more civilized way of taking public transportation.
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According to a regulation issued by Nanjing’s transport authorities, passengers are prohibited from eating or drinking on subway trains. It has generated considerable discussion in society. People’s opinions over it vary.
I am strongly opposed to the rule for the following reasons. First of all, the society should show more tolerance towards the passengers eating on the train. Due to their tight schedule, they have no choice but to take advantage of the time on the subway for their meal. In addition, some people like those with diabetes do need to eat food at particular times to control their sugar level. It is improper for the authority to fine them for their eating behavior. Last but not least, the regulation is funny in that there should be food stores inside some subway stations!
In short, not only will the regulation bring much inconvenience to passengers, but it will also spoil the reputation of the subway.