告别中式英语，来一次想说就说的释放（一）

同学A是某大学英语专业大一新生。同学B是留学海归，刚任职某外企市场部，以下是二人的一段英语聊天：

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时间：2019/03/01

地点：某英语聊天群

A: Hello, today is March 1st. I hope each of us can have a good beginning of this month. Have a nice day.(1)
B: Thanks. Today I used an automatic machine to take photo, which declares itself as the leading machine in this world. But the photo is super ugly.(2)
A: What is this?(3)
B: I used it to take photo for my CV, but too ugly to be used.(4)
A: Oh, are you looking for the job?(5)
B: Yeah I quited recently.(6)

B: If you guys see the machine, don’t even think of trying.(7)
A: What does it look like?(8)
B: It’s named APM and it looks like ordinary 大头贴 machine.(9)
A: Oh, a photo machine, but I can not search it online.(10)
B: There are a lot in cinemas and metro stations.(11)
A: Metro?(12)
B: Yeah, subway station.(13)
A: Maybe I will pay attention on it next time.(14)

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（一）聊天内容的英语纠错：

第一句话：没有任何的语法错误，但是典型的中式英语。修改为：I hope each of us can get the month off to a good start.

同样的意思，用off to a good start这个短语来表达是非常地道的。看一下两个例句：

I'm off to a good start, but I still need to focus a lot in order to win.
He's off to a good start in the race, but can he keep it up?

第二句话：这句话说得已经很好了，显示了B同学熟练的语法功底。如果想追求更清晰的表达，可以更改为：I took a photo with an automatic photo machine which declares itself as the leading machine in the world.

1, 将automatic photo移位，与修饰它的从句的位置更近，这样的表达更清晰。
2, “in this world” 在英语中是很少用到的。如果想表达世界上独一无二，领先等的意思，均为 “in the world”。
3, 最后部分的时态要用过去时。这个是一个比较难理解的点，但是因为对照片的评价是过去发生的，所以用过去时。同时将“but”换成“however”更合适：However the photo was super ugly.

第三句话：对于英语水平不高的同学，群聊天练口语时经常会使用这样的简单问句来继续聊天，其实完全可以顺势表达下对对方的话的反映，这样更自然。这里可以说 “Oh, no way!”

第五句话：这里的 “looking for the job”的冠词要用不定冠词“a”，不是“the”。A同学作为一名大一新生，犯这样的语法错误是合情合理的。

第六句话：这里的动词quit，过去式也是quit。B同学作为留学海归，这样的错误也是合情合理的。

第九句话：这里的错误也很常见，即使英语比较好的同学也经常会说错。

1, “named”变成“called”
2, “大头贴machine”的英语表达可以是“photo booth”
3, 缺少不定冠词“an”

A photo booth

第十句话：“search”改成“find”。

第十三句话：在后半句前面加上“like”更地道。

第十四句话：

1, 这句话读来很不礼貌。当别人和你分享后，不好说“Maybe”。
2, pay attention to, 不是 “on”
3, 这里更合适的说法：I’ll keep an eye out for it next time.

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（二）整段聊天修改稿：

A: Hello, today is March 1st. I hope each of us can get the month off to a good start. Have a nice day.
B: Thanks. Today I took a photo with an automatic photo machine which declares itself as the leading machine in the world. However the photo was super ugly.
A: Oh, no way!
B: I used it to take photo for my CV, but too ugly to be used.
A: Oh. Are you looking for a job?
B: Yeah I quit recently.
B: If you guys see the machine, don’t even think of trying.
A: What does it look like?
B: It’s called APM and it looks like an ordinary photo booth.
A: Oh, a photo machine, but I can not find it online.
B: There are a lot in cinemas and metro stations.
A: Metro?
B: Yeah, like subway station.
A: I’ll keep an eye out for it next time.

从聊天内容上，很明显地看出B同学的英文水平很好，几乎可以达到流利的英语输写聊天。类似高度英语水平的同学要多注意小地方。A同学的英文虽然是初级水平，但却能非常大胆地参与聊天，特别难能可贵，毕竟勇敢张嘴才是攻克英语的利器。

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